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첨삭지기 |조회 90| 추천 0
- 2025.01.15




My name is Sua Kim.
I turned 13years old just last year.
I am a middle school student.
I live in an apartment in Sejong with my family.
I’m a student, so I go to school. But now, winter vacation has comecame to our school. So, I’m taking a break at my home.
I have many hobbies, and theseThis hobbies have something in common. a commonality. They are very artistic. Because, I like art. This hobbies is good at These hobbies help me improve my your artistic sense.
My dream is to be an astronomical photographer. So someday, I want to beIm famous for space photography. due to my space pictures.
I turned 13
I am a middle school student.
I live in an apartment in Sejong with my family.
I’m a student, so I go to school. But now, winter vacation has come
I have many hobbies, and these
My dream is to be an astronomical photographer. So someday, I want to be
-> 자신의 성격, 경험에 대한 이야기가 추가적으로 들어간다면 더 좋은 점수를 받으실 수 있을 것 같습니다.
또한 사소한 실수가 많아 수정이 필요했습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
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| 24 | [OPIc] 첨삭부탁드립니다 | Sh | 70 | 2025.01.15 |
| 23 | [OPIc] RE:첨삭답변드립니다. | 첨삭지기 | 72 | 2025.01.15 |
| 22 | [OPIc] 첨삭이요 | In | 97 | 2025.01.15 |
| 21 | [OPIc] RE:첨삭답변드립니다. |


























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