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RE:첨삭부탁드립니다.

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좋아하는 공원



One of the parks I like
to go to is 000 park.



I live in the suburb of Cheongju. The park
is a 20min walk from my house.



It is next to the library that I often go
to. There is a large summer house in the center, with a circle walkway. And
then, there are the exercise machine is exercising
equipment
for public use that anybody could
use
. It is the only park in the neighborhood, so I’ll I see a lot of people. And I love nature, so I go to
the park at least 3 times a week for a walk.



In my opinion, this is an excellent place
to go for a stroll of and enjoy nature.



만약, 좋아하는 공원 질문에서 공원에서 하는 활동을 물어볼 때, 위에 말했던 문장으로 똑같이 시작해도 되나요?



->
안되는 건 아니지만 두괄식으로 질문에 대한
답을 먼저 제시한 후 에피소드를 빌드업 하는 것이 듣는 사람 입장에서 명확하고 이해하기 쉽습니다.



 



공원에서 하는 활동 경향



The park is a 20min walk from my house. I
go there at least three times a week. And I typically go alone. I go for a
stroll in the park in the evening. The main activity I do at the park is
jogging. And if I happen to have enough energy, I’ll do some exercises on the
workout machines. I love my workouts at the park because I always feel
refreshed after my walks. I’d much rather much
be out in nature than be stuck inside in a gym.



->
좋습니다.



 



나의 쇼핑 습관



Shopping is one of my favorite things to
do, I decide what I want to wear online and try it on in the store. I often
check out different brand apps, I capture clothes I want to buy. And put them
in my photos app folder. I usually go shopping alone. Because I have a very
clear idea of what I want and it takes a long time to fit. I do this at least
once a month. I love shopping because after a successful shopping trip, I feel
much more relaxed.



  



쇼핑하다 겪은 문제



I once had a problem when trying to fit
out clothes.



I got dressed, went to look in check the mirror outside, I was in the dressing room, and while I was checking the
mirror
, someone I didn’t know entered went
inside
the fitting room. I thought maybe there was a fitting room number
mix up because it was crowded. But when I went back in, my phone was gone. So,
I looked at checked the CCTV and he had taken my phone, and he walked out left.



I kept calling the employee’s phone. And my
parents kept calling my phone.



Finally, my phone was at the bakery I found my phone at the bakery. He said, he picked it
up and left it at the bakery.



From this incident, I never leave mine
my belongings behind.



 



나의 집



I live on the third floor of an apartment
with my family. My apartment is quite cozy, and I like living in it here very much.



My house has a kitchen, a living room, and
3 rooms. Of those, the room I like the most is my bedroom, which is located
right beside the kitchen. My bedroom is not a large room, but it is my safe heaven.
It is a simple room with only the essential essentials
like hanger, a desk and a bed. And I love postcards of my travels, so I have
them on the wall. The postcards relax my mind.



Of all the rooms in my house, my bedroom is
definitely my favorite place to hang out. The only complaint I have is that the
room needs some new furniture. I may put in a new chest of drawers.



 



과거와 현재 집 비교



Until 1 year ago, I lived in a villa in
a
downtown of cheongju with my family. It was the place where I grew up, and
it was very different from where I live now. 
Back then, I live lived in a 3 room villa in a noisy neighborhood. And
there was a park nearby, and I’d go jogging everyday. In contrast, my current
home is a large apartment in a quiet neighborhood. It have has many windows, so I often open a window to
ventilate. And it is a 20min walk to the park, but there is a gym in the
apartment. So, I can workout everyday.



 



집에서 겪은 문제



A big problem I had with my home was mold
on the walls. I was worried about mold during the rain season, and I did
encounter it
I was already worried about molds
during rainy season, and just as expected, we found molds on the wall.



My mom and I used bleach to clean the mold,
and we opened the windows for good ventilation. Then we changed to put on new wallpaper, and we became concerned about
the moisture.



I became concerned about humidity in my
house because of this experience.


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