해커스토익스피킹 점수예측서비스 Q11 첨삭부탁드립니다.

Q11. 야외 운동 vs 헬스장 운동 중 선호하는 것은?

I think it is better to exercise in a gym
with equipment.

This is because there is
a gym near my house that I often go to.

First, because it is convenient. There is a community center in my
neighborhood which has a fitness center,
and all the residents (who live in my apartment) goes there.

Also, there is my friend, many of my friends go to that gym as well, so I can
meet my friends there.

so, I like to go to the fitness center and
exercise with the equipment.

second, I can save the money. I'm
always very tight with the budget but the fitness center is in the community
center and It's only for the residents. so it's more cheaper than the
other fitness center centers. so, I think
it is better to exercise in a gym with equipment.

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잘하셨습니다. 다음에는 야외 운동과 비교해서 헬스장이 갖는 장점들을 부각하면 더 좋을 것 같아요.